1.We are out of cookies. It is important because I love CHOCOLATE COOKIES.
2. When I don't have something to eat I get cranky.
3. We should by more cookies and put a limit on them.
4.We each get two cookies. Instead of one box buy two.
5.This solution will keep me from being cranky.
The Missing Chocolate Cookies
The most absouletly delicous chocolate chip cookies in the universe are gone! This is a herendous problem because it is known throughout the land that if there isn't anything to eat a tornado of crankiness comes over me and when that happens NO ONE is happy. Things go flying, pets flee scurrying, and no one wants to be any where near me. We must find the missing chocalate cookies!
"Order, order in the court!" yelled the judge. " Jared, you have been accused of eating Patrick's favorite cookies. Do you deny it?"
"Your honor, there is no way I could of eaten the cookies. You see I have given them up for lent." demanded Jared.
"Jury?"
" We hear by clear the convicted of all charges."
"Case dismissed."
"So, Jared was proven innocent and cleared of all charges. If he didn't do it then who did. Maybe they were thrown away! Who would do such a thing! They might have been stale? That must have been what happened! They were moldy and someone through them away!" I exclaimed.
"What to do, what to do? I could not eat anything? No, then I will get hungry. I could eat some fruit? Blahhh! that's gross! I could eat the vannila cookies? I don't really like those that much though. What should I do?"
"I've got it! Mom, will you go buy some more chocolate cookies?"
"Okay."
(15 minutes later) "Thank you so much Mom! Mmmmm,they taste so good. I feel so much better now."
The cookies were lost, but they are now fortunetly more chocolate cookies.Even though he couldn't find something else to eat, Mom came through and saved the day. Everything was right with the world. There were plenty of chocolate cookies to go around and everyone was happy. The world was at peace once again. At least until they ran out of chocolate cookies. But that is for another day.
Ha! Ha! Very clever, but don't get carried away with your introduction and forget to write the essay. I would suggest that you use a shortened version of this anecdote and end it with a clearly written problem of lost chocolate cookies as your introduction. The next three paragraphs could discuss your unhappy reaction to the loss of the cookies and a possible solution to finding the cookies. Then end your essay by repeating that this very unfortunate loss of chocolate cookies, although potentially disastrous, can be remedied by finding them. After that, you would hightlight the two possible ways to find the cookies and end with a clincher that relates back to your beginning anecdote.
idea 5 Organization 4 It is somewhat like a five-paragraph essay, but not quite. Word Choice 5 Voice 5 Very amusing! Fluency 5 Conventions 5 Total points 29 = A
Sixth Grade language arts page
Problem-Solution EssayOutline
1.We are out of cookies. It is important because I love CHOCOLATE COOKIES.2. When I don't have something to eat I get cranky.
3. We should by more cookies and put a limit on them.
4.We each get two cookies. Instead of one box buy two.
5.This solution will keep me from being cranky.
The Missing Chocolate Cookies
The most absouletly delicous chocolate chip cookies in the universe are gone! This is a herendous problem because it is known throughout the land that if there isn't anything to eat a tornado of crankiness comes over me and when that happens NO ONE is happy. Things go flying, pets flee scurrying, and no one wants to be any where near me. We must find the missing chocalate cookies!
"Order, order in the court!" yelled the judge. " Jared, you have been accused of eating Patrick's favorite cookies. Do you deny it?"
"Your honor, there is no way I could of eaten the cookies. You see I have given them up for lent." demanded Jared.
"Jury?"
" We hear by clear the convicted of all charges."
"Case dismissed."
"So, Jared was proven innocent and cleared of all charges. If he didn't do it then who did. Maybe they were thrown away! Who would do such a thing! They might have been stale? That must have been what happened! They were moldy and someone through them away!" I exclaimed.
"What to do, what to do? I could not eat anything? No, then I will get hungry. I could eat some fruit? Blahhh! that's gross! I could eat the vannila cookies? I don't really like those that much though. What should I do?"
"I've got it! Mom, will you go buy some more chocolate cookies?"
"Okay."
(15 minutes later) "Thank you so much Mom! Mmmmm,they taste so good. I feel so much better now."
The cookies were lost, but they are now fortunetly more chocolate cookies.Even though he couldn't find something else to eat, Mom came through and saved the day. Everything was right with the world. There were plenty of chocolate cookies to go around and everyone was happy. The world was at peace once again. At least until they ran out of chocolate cookies. But that is for another day.
Ha! Ha! Very clever, but don't get carried away with your introduction and forget to write the essay. I would suggest that you use a shortened version of this anecdote and end it with a clearly written problem of lost chocolate cookies as your introduction. The next three paragraphs could discuss your unhappy reaction to the loss of the cookies and a possible solution to finding the cookies. Then end your essay by repeating that this very unfortunate loss of chocolate cookies, although potentially disastrous, can be remedied by finding them. After that, you would hightlight the two possible ways to find the cookies and end with a clincher that relates back to your beginning anecdote.
idea 5
Organization 4 It is somewhat like a five-paragraph essay, but not quite.
Word Choice 5
Voice 5 Very amusing!
Fluency 5
Conventions 5
Total points 29 = A